I'm a songwriter...

[H2O AnthraX]

Well, title says it all. Can I get some feedback? No laughing if they're horrible. D:

I'll post some new ones after I polish a couple in my little black book of songs.

There’s nothing in the bottle
That helps me understand
The heart of a woman
The pain of a man

I’m still in the running
But far from the goal
Who says that hurting
Is good for the soul
If time still brings healing
I ought to be whole
It’s ages and ages
I’m losing control

I’m still in Las Vegas
But don’t tell a soul
Trying to win back with Jokers
What the Queen went and stole

I’m still in the running
But far from the goal
Who says that hurting
Is good for the soul
If time still brings healing
I ought to be whole
It’s ages and ages
I’m losing control

A gambler with a heartache
At the table’s lost end
Take down the bottle
And pour me a friend

There’s nothing in the bottle
That helps me understand
The heart of a woman

[PMS Doc]

It's interesting, I like the card reference. I'd have to hear it performed though :P hint hint

[H2O AnthraX]

I can play the acoustic guitar, but I absolutely cannot sing. So, sorry Doc. XD

[Rizkit]

*laughs*

Jkjk no but seriously, I really liked it! I agree with Doc. Love the card metaphor thingy you have there.

Lets hear you sing anyway! Hahaha :p

[H2O AnthraX]

Here's one from my little black book. :mvshock:

Tonight's the worst that I've felt in a long time.
You made me feel so good that it's all right.
I wanted to tell you, you looked so beautiful,
As the snow danced off your eyes.
I know that you want someone else so it's not right.
I know that it's not me you think of late at night.
But if I had the chance you know I'd tell you everything I think.

Don't say anything if you don't wanna hear it back from me.
Don't make promies you know you'll never keep.
I'm sorry that I'm such a mess, I've been let down again.
Well I need you to help me out,
I think that you should let me win.

Well lately it seems everything I need,
Comes so easily to everyone other than me.
I wanted this so bad and did you even notice it,
500 miles from home and I feel alone.

Don't say anything if you don't wanna hear it back from me.
Don't make promies you know you'll never keep.
I'm sorry that I'm such a mess, I've been let down again.
Well I need you to help me out,
I think that you should let me win.

I know that you want someone else so it's not right.
I know that it's not me you think of late at night.
But if I had the chance you know I'd tell you everything I think.

Don't say anything if you don't wanna hear it back from me.
Don't make promies you know you'll never keep.
I'm sorry that I'm such a mess, I've been let down again.
Well I need you to help me out,
I think that you should let me win.
Let me win.
Let me win.