would like your opinions mates :)

[Night]

Yea...this is one of my newest songs i wrote for my band (we are puttin up a myspace soon...and we sound like Red Hot Chili Peppers.....sorta, lol)

let me know your thoughts..i would appreciate them :)

but anyways..i got the band name down!...its gonna be called "The Fall of Ideas" :) but yea..heres a rough..and the stuff in brackets..i might put in..but i dont know...and i have like 2 ideas for choruses...its a rough so give me a break everyone!>..and let me know what you think...

Title: ...still thinkin of one..[[

(I'm just) alone in my room
Trying to think of things to do
No one wants to play
And no one wants to stay (with me)

I try to make new friends
But day by day i fall (fail) through again (fail again??)
I just hope and pray
That the one will come to me someday

Ohh no, why is it always me,
Who gets lost and hurt along the way
I (just) hope to see, through this pain,
And move along someday

I can see the sunset, the sunset on her smiling face
That beautiful smiling face
As i look into her eyes i see
her future going along with me (growing old with me)

Ohh no, why does it have to be this way
Always hurting, always failing
(Why cant i live strong someday, Ohhhh why cant i live strong some day)

All the people hurting me
Its so unbearable i cant see
No friends, no laughter and no future
I've already seen the loser i am, so why dont you run (away from me?)

Ohh no, why does it have to be this way
Alwyas hurting, always falling
Cant you see im Fai-ai-ling......
[taper after soft guitar solo]]]


SOOO YEA>....i know ...kinda bad :/

but let me know all your thoughts..i wrote it from my heart..and i wont be upset if you all hate it, ill understand

Thanks a load everyone

Nick


PS: Thanks loads again!

[Night]

please? anyone? lol i would really like a comment even if all it is is "meh" lol
-Nick

[KF Striker]

Personally, is cool son, and im not jus sayin dat cuz u is ma brotha

[Night]

thanks bro :)

[PMS Slayergirl]

its rly good nick i love it...:D

[Night]

awwww thanks :)
i hope to get that one finalized soon for my band...:P

but yea, appreciate it! :D
much <3 steph :P
-Nick

[Apoth3osis]

Its kinda hard to say something without hearing the actual music. I can relate to the lyrics, so... so far so good, but i'll hold my opinion untill I hear the actual song.