You, Me, And Us

[Lady Eve PMS]

I'll be glad if anyone is reading this or cares to read the poems in this area of the forums.

I'd just like to say that I used to write a lot of poetry and post it on the orginal forums, but have lost all inspiration since. On the good/bad side I finally had something to write about in the last few days. Sadness, Disappointment, and a bit of Betrayal. The bad side of love. Luckily for me I have a feeling things may get better than they are. I don't care too much for comments. All I ask: just please take time to read it. For I won't be posting in this section for awhile. :)

You, Me, And Us

You gave me hope
You shared your love
My heart floated
Upon a white dove

My every wish
Was your command
From buying Wendy’s
To holding my hand

We spent an afternoon
In a beautiful park
We were together
Even after dark

Saying goodbye
Killed me inside
And left us hanging
With nothing to hide

I wrote you four letters
Receiving none in return
Painful for you or not
It was I who felt the burn

You offered your trust
You were always so fun
I remember it all
But now there’s none

The distance between us
Is challenging our emotions
Stirring up ill will
And causing commotion

We shouldn’t dwell
On the possibilities of losing
Our future lives
Are to our choosing

Our love is fading
As the wheel of time spins
Unless we fix this
No one wins

[PMS Chocolate]

Wow . .. i know u don't want any comments Demongurl . . . but that's really amazing how close it is to my relationship too . . . well, what my relationship easily could be if i/he/we lose motivation and strength.

i like ur poem cuz i can tell it's really personal . . . but readers can connect it with their own experiences . . . helps get the msg across, w/out ppl thinking about u too much, u know?

i really, really like it.

[CaptainDemon]

Alena, I see the world in words. What I see in someone's face or what I read on their poetry is something I can read into, and I'm good at it. This poem may be about the bad side of love, but there's something else. You don't want it to end, the problems faced are fixable. And that's just another part of love.

I see the world in words, and the only thing I see here is how much you love each other. No one's perfect, everyone has problems, and there are always bad times. I admire you for how you deal with those bad times. You say I'm a pro at poetry, but you're a hero to me, cause it's what you have to say that matters, not how you say it.

[Lady Eve PMS]

Thanks Addie :) Glad you like it.

I didn't say I didn't want comments, but just that I don't want to pressure people to comment me just out of pity or something.
I'm glad you can relate to my past experiences. That seems to be an important factor for all writers: relating their work to their audience.

This poem was more of a release of emotions I'm holding in. Just something to get off my chest, so to speak. :/

[Lady Eve PMS]

Wow Will, your reply was prose...that's how good you write. :)

You were right though. Things are fixable and that's how I'll see them until something changes for the best or worst.

This is the first and last time I'm a hero. :/ Never been called one before and I don't plan on receiving that title again. :p

[CaptainDemon]

Wow Will, your reply was prose...that's how good you write. :)

You were right though. Things are fixable and that's how I'll see them until something changes for the best or worst.

This is the first and last time I'm a hero. :/ Never been called one before and I don't plan on receiving that title again. :p

considering everything but poetry is prose, I guess it is :p I know what you mean by it, it was one of the rare times I have something clear and coherent to say. It's true though :o

And you are so a hero, I'm gonna call you that from now on. Or would it be heroine?

[PMS Chocolate]

Alena . . . u should really try to put together a book of your poetry some day . . . that would be so fulfilling for u . . .not necessarily to publish (although i would be first in line to get it signed, lol), but just for u to look back on. it would be so cool to see an entire collection.

i hope other ppl take the time to read more of ur work, cuz it's wicked good :) (lol, is "wicked" too "mainer" for u all?)

[H2O Tyrant Sparda]

Good poem, at first i thought cus of the title, it had something to do with you me and dupree:D but it was great

[Lady Eve PMS]

Addie...I thought about the poem book thing awhile back. It's a great idea. I should really get all my poems together. hmmm

thanks Creed :) I had a rough time coming up with a title for this poem.

[The One and Only Lovable]

Its wonderful Demongurl. You always write amazing poems.. and regardless if you havent wrote one in a while or not. you will always be good at it. i really enjoyed reading this poem. The way i see it. Your poems touch me in a way very few others do. I have to be able to see it in my mind what the poems about and what the meaning is underneath it all. You are very good at it. I have always loved your poems. This one was amazing as well.

[S w a k]

I really loved that.

[Lady Eve PMS]

Is that really you Lovable? :) If so, it's wonderful to see you back on the forums, and in the poetry section. Thank you for the compliments. It's easier for me to believe in my writing abilities when others offer their own opinions.

I wanted to get all my feelings out at once in this poem, from happiness, through sadness and frustration, eventually to hope. I'm just glad you were able to relate and understand my poem's message(s). And at least I know now that you adore my poetry. :)


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I'm glad you loved it L1ke W0ah :)



If anyone wants to see any of my other poems, you can go to http://www.fictionpress.com and search for my penname WickedSiren :p